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Driving down the interstate, minding my own business while I listened to music at the highest possible decibel, I noticed the driver next to me looking around nervously has he crept past me into the adjacent lane. It wasn't until after he had safely tucked his little blue car in between the semi driver who trucked along comfortably and the irate blasphemy-breathing flannel shirted rusty pick-up driver who was suddenly lying on his horn. I looked in my rear view mirror and noticed a mustang coming up behind me traveling about twenty miles per hour faster than I was. I had to make a choice, and fast! Driving that day I realized two things about interstate driving; it can be dangerous and it can be amusing. The amusing part is watching how all the drivers interact with each other. The interactions remind me of a Winnie the Pooh cartoon. Each driver on the road can be categorized into one of three groups; Tigger drivers, Piglet drivers, or Pooh drivers.

Tigger is a one-of-a kind creature, who jumps all over the place. He acts on every impulse; his bouncy manner often leads him to leap before he looks. Like the character, Tigger drivers often act on impulse. They are the most dangerous of the three groups. These are the drivers who are often found in the fast lane going as fast as the traffic will allow. If another car gets in the way of one of these reckless drivers, they will continue on their way as close to the car in front of them as possible. Similar to the Tigger character, these drivers leap before they look, oftentimes resulting in cutting off another driver.

Winnie the Pooh is a loveable little bear who is stuffed with fluff. In the cartoon, he endlessly craves honey; the mere thought of it distracts him from whatever adventure he is on. His distractions often lead to trouble. Pooh drivers are also frequently distracted, whether they are turned around yelling at their kids, talking on a cell phone, putting on make up, or simply picking their nose, these drivers and not completely concentrating on the road ahead of them. Pooh drivers can repeatedly be spotted veering back and forth from the shoulder to the road. Most of the time these drivers are the cause of traffic jams. Because of their constant inattentiveness, Pooh drivers do not realize traffic is slowing down until the last minute and they are forced to slam on their brakes. This inevitably causes a chain reaction with other drivers on the road.

Piglet is a soft-spoken and skittish little fellow whose generosity and humility far outweigh his meager size. His careful movements, anxious wringing of hands, and occasionally stuttering voice, convey his nervousness and fear of the unknown. Similar to Piglet, the Piglet drivers are very cautious and sometimes even a little nervous. New drivers and the more seasoned drivers fall into this category. These drivers tend to drive mostly in the slow lane at the lowest possible speed. Piglet drivers are reluctant to change lanes, but on the rare occurrences that they do, the merge is slow. Piglet drivers are the safest of the three groups. They start hitting their brakes long before they reach a traffic jam. Piglet drivers are often annoying to the Tigger drivers because of their slow speeds.

Driving on the interstate can be like watching a cartoon. With the variety of driver personalities, which are bound to clash, it makes for a very amusing show. With all of the Pooh, Piglet and Tigger drivers on the interstates it can be a very dangerous and interesting place to be.What do you think about this.?
You really hook the reader in. I like it! You should start a new paragraph at ';Driving that day...';, or, at least, make it flow a little better at this part because you shift from the present to the past.



I love how you use Pooh, Piglet, and Tigger. It's a really nice metaphor. You really put thought into this and I'm sure that you'll get a good grade!